英語是通向國外的橋梁，下學(xué)期就要成為高三學(xué)子的你，是否還在為自己的英語作文而煩惱呢?高考英語作文是英語中拉分與提高分?jǐn)?shù)的重要一城，必須做到不容有失，以下是學(xué)習(xí)啦網(wǎng)小編為你準(zhǔn)備的高考英語作文賞析——Our Spring Outing(附名師點評)

　　【北京卷】

　　【試題回放】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為?？⒄Z園地寫一篇題為“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，敘述上周你們班從準(zhǔn)備春游到春游結(jié)束的完整過程。

　　注意： 詞數(shù)不少于60.

　　提示詞： 游樂園amusement park 垃圾箱bin

　　Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

　　The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

　　We were tired but happy.

　　【名師點評】

　　本情景作文的內(nèi)容要點如下：1.討論;2.爬山;3.檢拾別人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。內(nèi)容要點可用不同方式表達(dá)。本文覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點，較好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。其中，寫作主題突出，詳略得當(dāng)，應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，而且有效的使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文機(jī)構(gòu)緊湊。本文敘述清楚，描寫細(xì)致，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用了很多富有表現(xiàn)力的詞和句型，例如：“set off early”，“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等，將活動的情形很形象地描述了出來。

　　積累卡片英漢互譯

　　好詞1 set off 出發(fā)2. litter n.廢棄物3.respectively adv.分別地

　　好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

　　在爬山時，我們享受著溫暖的陽光和美麗的風(fēng)景。

　　1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

　　然而，當(dāng)我們登上山頂，被眼前的一幕驚呆了：瓶子和香蕉皮這樣的廢棄物到處都是。

　　評析：細(xì)節(jié)描寫，生動形象。“shock”一詞也用得生動傳神。